It wasn't much of a test, but I thank *god* that you of a people recognized the Lawrence model. It would have been one hell of a failure if you hadn't.
Mind you, if you're only interest was in find out what mannerism came next, that's a failure as well.
SCK suggested the biggest flaw was the lack of conflict/plot, which (maybe, kinda) parses with what you said. I think he may be right. Which would make the piece less true to my fictional impulse, but many a better piece of fiction.
It's good to know you enjoyed reading it, though, even if it left you feeling polluted.And better to be reassured you're still talking to me,after theo other night's unpleasantness.
Re: Your story
Mind you, if you're only interest was in find out what mannerism came next, that's a failure as well.
SCK suggested the biggest flaw was the lack of conflict/plot, which (maybe, kinda) parses with what you said. I think he may be right. Which would make the piece less true to my fictional impulse, but many a better piece of fiction.
It's good to know you enjoyed reading it, though, even if it left you feeling polluted.And better to be reassured you're still talking to me,after theo other night's unpleasantness.